I have written and submitted an initial draft of the paper answering the following question:
“What were some of the key ways in which the “Arab world” changed from pre-Islamic times to when Islam was first introduced and began to spread (up to the end of the 8th century CE)? Pick two major socio-economic, political, religious, or cultural institutions or values to focus on in your exploration of how and why these values and institutions changed. Consider both the societies in which these institutions and values were originally present, and the societies into which Islam spread.“
And have received the following feedback for my revision:
“No points to support thesis and conclusion. Essay describes how the Arab World changed and expanded in the pat but does the points to not lead to showing how those changes have an effect today as the thesis stated. Please revise and add points by connecting the initial statements of your essay to how the points are still prevalent in the Arab World.”
Using the feedback, please revise my Essay’s initial draft. You may restructure the Essay and add points from articles found online. However, make sure to utilize the MLA format. This revision is for an intermediate English class so make sure the writing is well thought out and clear. Please revise the paper properly, using points which help add to my argument.
Also attached are the excerpts I used as sources for my paper. They should give you some reference.